David Guinness

Thanks very much. That's what I had tried to do. For the performance of it, the "Host" and I used all props mentioned, and I recorded and had played intro ...

Fascinating read. It reminded me of some of those spam emails I receive, except with a purpose. It also seemed to echo some of John Lennon's later lyrics. I'm very ...

Good poem. It's easy to hear the voice of the speaker.

I liked reading this, though it felt a bit cliched to me. You might play around with a different metaphors- "monster" didn't seem quite powerful enough to do the rest ...

The second stanza is wonderful, really wonderful. I enjoyed this poem very much, but the beginning and end seemed disconnected from the middle.

I like this very much. You gave a clear, powerful message, with well-chosen words. I look forward to reading more of your work!

Thank you SO MUCH for rhyming "correctly". Very effective word choice and phrasing. The last line is... so powerful. Wonderful work.

I like these very much, especially "Waves". Keep posting! :)

You also run the risk of people thinking you're stoned. :)

I like it! :) Although you do have several "he"s that I think may be missing "t"s.

I really don't know what to say. This is... incredibly politically incorrect. :?

I actually was writing this as a sort of mini-mini-essay. But I see now I really can't do it justice like that. And I do have a million things to ...

At this point, it's a very nice poem, instead of song lyrics... I would suggest you have a sort of flashback and explain exactly what you needed and they wanted ...

Thanks, Elephant! there any way to indent?... Good. I'm glad. A friend of mine didn't get it, but he was half-asleep at the time, so... :lol:

Thank you all. I actually did have it in paragraph format, but apparently I don't know how to use the "PRE" function correctly, because it did exactly the opposite of ...